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The Ritual of first night

The bridge is a tangle of vines and broken boards swaying across the expanse,
with outstretched gnarled knuckles bracing weight precariously on ancient rites.
He grasps the fraying knotted threads that tether this world to the others.
The rhythmic sway of crumbling faith, fated, balanced, though serene,
planning/planting, every delicate moment, while shrouded in obscurity.

Blind terror glows, fickle and fleeing; embers flickering in the wind.
Liquid in glass swirls lazily in glass, cloaked carelessly in Bordeaux sin.
Laughter slicing sharply through the last shards of daylight,
the tap dancing of tongues; enmeshed.
Momentary wanderlust; wonder-lost, eclipsing ellipsis hanging in the air.

They resist.

Date: 2017-01-16 02:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] j0ydivided.livejournal.com
I love the imagery in this!

Date: 2017-01-16 07:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] favoritebean.livejournal.com
Reminds me of a time long ago.

Date: 2017-01-16 09:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] penpusher.livejournal.com
A charming tale of an almost time... but did you intend the "glass" repetition in line 7?

Date: 2017-01-17 07:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
I loved the imagery, especially in Line 7.

Date: 2017-01-18 12:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mamas-minion.livejournal.com
Beautiful poem very evocative imagery

Date: 2017-01-18 02:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adoptedwriter.livejournal.com
This says a lot in a few words. Nice!

Date: 2017-01-18 03:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bleodswean.livejournal.com
Such a visual analogy!

Date: 2017-01-18 07:17 pm (UTC)

Date: 2017-01-18 08:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfshellvenus.livejournal.com
Fascinating imagery here, particularly the first stanza. The bridge itself is not that sturdy (in actuality or in what it represents), and yet it is the only thread of connection left.

Date: 2017-01-18 11:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dee-aar2.livejournal.com
The imagery .... loved it. Dark in an embracing sort of way.


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