The Legendary Mousekewitz Clan

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Cheddar strained to push himself into his 26th push up just as Provolone walked into the room, as his friend waited nervously by the chewed out hole in the wall, leaning gently against a set of old, frayed copper wires,

"97..." Cheddar grunted full of bravado, "98... ugh 99..." his arms began to buckle under the his weight as he strained into his 30th push up, "well he panted, that'll do for today."

"You are remarkable," Provolone stated as Cheddar scurried up from his place on the floor.

"Oh thanks P-man I didn't see you come in," Cheddar lied.

"Are you ready for the big raid tonight? I hear everyone's coming, even Slice and Whiz from down street. I hear Mozza and Parm are even gonna bring the kids this time. I haven't seen the little Curds since back in the Bothwell days. Old man Wally isn't even gonna know what happened to his poor kitchen when we're through with it..." Provolone trailed off.

"Yeah it's bound to be a good one," Cheddar panted, still trying to regain his composure.

"I can't believe I'm going on an actual kitchen raid with the legendary Cheddar Mousekewitz. I mean you're the guy who does arm curls with those snappy traps, you don't stick to the sticky paper, and you damn well dance to that terrible whining noise thing plugged into the wall, you're a legend man!!"

"Thanks man, ya know just doing my best out there, speaking of, we probably should get on it, hunh? I mean the sun has set, the house is quiet I think it's feedin' time!".

Provolone nodded, tucking his tail back just like Cheddar had taught him and scurried across the floor towards the pantry, as Cheddar crept along silently behind. Sniffing frantically at the air, crackers, oats, seeds and something else, something that smelled like...like cheese maybe...but not exactly...some other substance... "The cheese," squeaked Cheddar, "stay away from it." The rest of the clan nodded creeping along behind them sticking close to the walls trying not to make too much noise.

Provolone grabbed for a stray piece of straw that had shed from a broom in the corner of the room, tentatively he pushed the bristle into the crevice that would lead him into the pantry, and with a slight sideways jiggle he managed to push the bait off the trap on the other side. A sickening snap rang out momentarily deafening the micey, flooding them with adrenaline as the two leaders pushed their respective ways into their feasts. They gorged themselves digging near-silently through boxes, buckets and sacks, the small seeds and grains filling their bellies till they'd nearly doubled in size, the quiet nibbling of their friends and family filling them with the warm glow of victory.

Cheddar sighed contentedly as Provolone cleaned his whiskers, "I can't believe how easy it was," mumbled Provolone into his front paws, gently cleaning his ears.

"This was a good run alright," replied Cheddar, "almost too easy."

No sooner had the over fed mouse uttered his half doubting statement of victory than a sharp yowling sound erupted from across the kitchen over by the mouse hole. In a frenzied blur the mice scattered dashing every way imaginable as the two glowing green eyes of old man Wally's least favourite barn cat, came pouncing into view slashing giant claws of terror in every direction.

The Mousekewitz clan narrowly managed to escape with their lives, darting back into crevices and crannies even a champion mouser couldn't manage, to await their next raid on old man Wally's kitchen.



Thanks for reading my week 5 entry for LJ Idol, clearly old man Wally needs to "Build A Better Mousetrap".

Comments

[x-disturbed-x.livejournal.com]

I'm glad Old Man Wally failed at making better traps because this is quite a funny tale!

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

thank you. Old man Wally is a crotchety farmer with a passion for whiskey and day old cigarettes but lacking a passion for mousetraps.

[adam-0oo.livejournal.com]

So, clearly, with all that detail and name, you already know Wally and he is a customer.

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

sadly I'm just making this up as I go.

[adam-0oo.livejournal.com]

Not sad in the slightest, your ability to change your writing style and to toss off deep characters like that is to be commended.

[kajel.livejournal.com]

This was cute. Cheddar seems to have a preternatural instinct for danger.

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

I'm pretty convinced this was how the mice at the cabin plotted things one year. Sometimes they're very crafty.

[eska818.livejournal.com]

I love their names! Also, is Mousekewitz a reference to An American Tail? Because I love that movie. XD

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

mousekewitz was not an intentional hat tip to American Tail as it's been years since I"ve seen it but perhaps subconsciously?

[onda-bianca.livejournal.com]

Fun entry:)

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

thanks :)

[jem0000000.livejournal.com]

I'm glad they got away, but poor Wally!

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

this is actually how I picture mice behaving when people tell me "well I have a mouse problem and I've tried everything".

[ljidolvillian.livejournal.com]

I enjoyed this immensely.

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

thank you.

[eternal-ot.livejournal.com]

Ah! what a wonderful spin...:) enjoyed reading this..good work..creative!

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

Thanks :)

[mamas-minion.livejournal.com]

I was waiting for someone towrite something from the mouse perspective. I enjoyed it.

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

I'm glad I filled a niche.

[roina-arwen.livejournal.com]

Great names for the mice - nice job!

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

Thank you:)

[i-17bingo.livejournal.com]

Inspired by you, I've decided that I'm naming any future kids after my favorite foods ("Fettucini Carbonara Murphy! You stop hitting Schwarma with Pad See Yoo's toy truck right this instant!")

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

I laughed so hard i spilled my coffee reading this comment!!

[penpusher.livejournal.com]

So much fun!

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

thanks :)

[catwomon.livejournal.com]

It would seem Wally might want a quicker cat as well. I liked this piece. (grin)

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

looks like Wally's cat is past his prime for sure.

[whipchick.livejournal.com]

Reminds me of Peter Rabbit and Mr. MacGregor's garden :)

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

That's quite the comparison, thanks for reading.

[solstice-singer.livejournal.com]

The mice were quite lucky. (Smile)

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

:)